August 31, 2022 - Chapter 1 of The Twisted Peak

• View Point - limited
  • Omniscient -
  • Limited - the character, you’re learning along with the character, hooks, the reader is being surprised along the way.
  • Omniscient can work
  • Sentences are jaring - “stepping into the water…”
  • Experiencing
  • Keeping the reader closer to what’s going
  • Share what he experiencing - excited, reasoning behind…
  • Clal is saying goodbye,
    • Look at it with pain in his
    • Internal…feeling
    • Emotions…
  • Don’t overdo showing
  • Can say, Clal looked at the sunset knowing the sunset quite this way
  • Show and also tell
  • Use the environment
    • The water receded and so did Clal’s thought
  • The thing in the setting is pointing out in this character
  • Arrielle: the way he’s seeing landscape, is directly how he feels about it.
  • Reflective of ….
  • The water swirls around his ankles…….
  • The water the place wants to keep him there
  • Use the environment
  • How would Clal act
  • Explore interactions -
    • If hit by apple, react more aggressively
    • Playful
    • But what if he over reacted.
  • How was he really feeling
    • Clal’s internal motivations and feelings
    • Helps to relate to that person
  • So what his feelings
  • Playful moment, know they won’t see …
  • He’s excited to leave
    • Then have something reminds him to refer back…
    • Why was I so excited to leave, throw back
  • Use emotions now to enhance the conflict later on, foreshadowing
  • Everything should be building on everything else
  • We might be stuck with something, because…
  • Live and keep within rules of rules
  • Don’t withhold information that didin’t need to be withhold.
    • Cherry picking
    • Plot line at the end
    • Core mystery
  • What does my main character know,
  • Hold back on things he wouldn’t know
  • Tell them more where they are going
  • Establish the stakes
    • Why are they doing what they are doing
  • Hold back on his personal secrets
  • Hold back on plot stuff
  • Point of View - limited
    • Helps make it more likely to have some of that mystery and suspense
  • The main character wants to know the answer
  • Holding too much back
    • People fill in the gaps with wrong things
  • Write so that is was meant to be…
  • Lead them by the thoughts of that character in the wrong direction on purpose
    • Practice that
  • Approach earlier, talk about the parents…
  • Find out…..
    • Your parents would be so proud
    • The first couple of pages
    • Creating a metaphor that ties to his past
      • This is my home, never been my whole home
    • Hole in his life
    • Memento of his parents, what he’s been told of his parents….
  • Everything reminds me of my loss of parents
  • Or reminded me of my parents
  • Hero’s journey

Action Item:

• Practice writing in first person limited

CLAL AND ANSA TALK ABOUT WHO THEIR PARENTS ARE. WHO MIGHT THEY BE. WHAT CLUES THEY’VE LEARNED. AND MAYBE THE WANT TO FINALLY FIND OUT MORE SINCE THEY ARE MOVING ON IN LIFE.

Who are Clal’s Parents?

Why was he left with his aunt and uncle.

• It was during the war, when the Wielders were hunted down.
• No more magic.
• No more unexplained occurrences
• It was the doing of Womlon’s army
• They came from the depths of the sea, a host.
• Morgreth heard the news, then concocted a plan to hide them.
• “Take the twins.”
• We will not let them come and destroy them.
• Clal and Ansa needed to stay in the outer world.
• They felt he would bring some good.
• They were wielders and were being hidden away.
• To the mountain, underneath it…
  • They lived in the valley of Lyrune,
  • But the mountain came and covered it.
• Clal’s parents live within Kelvkoroth.
• They live there and the light…
• But his parents, they didn’t know that he would be the chosen one.
• And when they go their, his parent see the twins and we see that there is a couple that recognizes them.
• Do they help him?
• They are wielders of light, and so is Clal.
• But Ansa was born with the power to move earth.
• So the tragedy is that his parents lived below while he grew up above.
• Did they watch him somehow?
• Did they feel him?
• IT WAS THE WAR OF THE WIELDERS
• THE WAR NAME
  • The Wielder’s War
  • Wielder’s War
  • Wielder Warfare
  • War of the Wielder
  • The Age of the Wielder - finished
  • End of the Wielder Age

Ages

• The Age of Hanon
• The Age of Womlon’s Demise
• The age of repopulation on Illia
• The Age of Growth
• The Age of the first empire
• The Age of the 3 Empires
• The Age of the Wielders
• The end of the Wielder Age
• The Age of Man - Clal’s Time
• The Age of the Dawning of Eternity
• The Age of Eternity

Clal - Light

Ansa - Earth

Rythe - Water

Leara - Fire

Larkin - Wind

Skyle - Wind